Repeat chorus poems as a Capulet at the family ball

Our class have been creating poems with a repeat chorus. The scenario was for the pupils to write as a Capulet at the ball in Act 1 Scene 5, describing the moment when Romeo Montague crashes their party. We agreed that our chorus would be "What a commotion, how rude!" The first section had to have three lines to express what they could see. The second had to have three lines expressing what they may hear with the first line comprising three one syllable words, the second having three two syllable and the third three three syllable words. The third section was to have three things that people might have been thinking at the time and the last was to have three things that people might have been heard to say.


Here are some of our poems:


What a commotion, how rude!
A twirling tribe,
Amusement and pleasure,
Chants of song, 
What a commotion, how rude!
Shock, mess, clash,
Dreadful, ruined, destroyed,
Abysmal, appalling, horrendous,
What a commotion, how rude!
Who is this trespasser?
What is his business here?
Is he a criminal?
What a commotion, how rude!
Leave us alone!
I hate this party!
I'm leaving!
What a commotion, how rude!


By Sophy (Year 6)


What a commotion, how rude!
Dancing females having fun,
Lots of men and women,
An uninvited man crashes the party,
What a commotion, how rude!
Gulp! Scream! Gasp!
Soundless, surprised, shocked,
Rumbling, screaming, rustling,
What a commotion, how rude!
How did he get in?
What's he doing here?
What's he going to do?
What a commotion, how rude!
What a pathetic man,
Get out of here!
Montague! Doesn't belong here.
What a commotion, how rude!


By Tawfiq (Year 4)


What a commotion, how rude!
Singing pirouetting princess
Ball fit for a wedding,
A Montague intruder,
What a commotion, how rude!
Gasp! Fright! Shock!
Silence, shouting, screaming,
Erupting, tumbling, squabbling, 
What a commotion, how rude!
What's he got planned?
Who's sent him?
What does he want?
What a commotion, how rude!
Get back to where you came from,
This isn't where you belong,
Tybalt, don't do it!
What a commotion, how rude!


By Rosie (Year 5)


What a commotion, how rude!
Beautiful ballerinas, pirouetting in front of me,
Arguments between us Capulets and Montagues,
People with shocked faces because of HIM!
What a commotion, how rude!
Shock, gulp, gasp!
Silence, arguing, music, 
Squabbling, wondering, discussion, 
What a commotion, how rude!
How's he here?
Who let him in?
How's he on the guest list?
What a commotion, how rude!
He doesn't belong here,
He's come to destroy our party,
What's on his mind?
What a commotion, how rude!


By Shauna (Year 6)


What a commotion, how rude!
Pirouetting princess,
Feast fit for a prince,
Capulets in costume, 
What a commotion, how rude!
Gulp! Scream! Gasp!
Silence, running, shouting,
Squabbling, erupting, rumbling,
What a commotion, how rude!
Get back to your own family, 
You're a Montague,
People like you don't belong here!
What a commotion, how rude!


By Sophie (Year 4)


What a commotion, how rude!
Dancing, prancing VIPs slowly twirling around like a Catherine Wheel,
Pirouetting, hyperactive guests standing under the midnight light,
Shining knights armour as bright as the yellow light stars above,
What a commotion, how rude!
Shock, grief, gasp!
Silence, fighting, horror,
Frightening, squabbling, chattering,
What a commotion, how rude!
Why is that rogue here?
Who let him in?
What is this scoundrel doing?
What a commotion, how rude!
What a terrible man!
Get back to your own family,
No, Tybalt, don't do it!
What a commotion, how rude!


By David (Year 6)